|| don't want to end up in Dallas
Hi. As a senior, I'm probably not the only one freaking out about finances. I've been accepted to U of M and I would love to go there. (I could elaborate, but you don't need to hear it, I'm sure.) The only thing keeping me from being absolutely positive it's where I'm going to go is scholarship money-- or lack thereof. They haven't offered me anything, and I really can't afford $20,000 a year despite what the FAFSA says. Here's the thing: I know I have the credentials. As of today I've been offered full rides to the University of Oklahoma, the University of Texas at Dallas and now Alma College-- and I haven't even applied to any of them. Part of me wants to just go up to Ann Arbor and throw a hissy fit and say "I'm a National Merit Finalist, pay attention to me!" and start to cry. I don't think it'll work so well, though.
So the next step is emailing them.
1) Who do I email? The department of financial aid, or the admissions office?
and 2) How does this sound?
To whom it may concern:
As of February 22, I have not received any notice of financial aid. The University of Michigan is my dream school-- great academics in a diverse atmosphere, set in the wonderful town of Ann Arbor. However, if I do not receive any financial aid, I cannot afford to attend the university. As a National Merit Finalist with a 32 ACT composite, I have been inundated with offers for fully paid tuition and room and board. I believe these qualities, along with the merit shown in managing both a general high school and a highly selective math, science and technology high school (the Macomb Mathematics Science Technology Center in Warren, MI,) show I have the drive and determination necessary to make a difference in the world. I am the kind of student the University of Michigan is seeking.
Please let me know if I am simply acting prematurely, or if I will have to accept an offer from another college solely due to financial reasons.
Too braggy? Not enough? Does it emphasize how much I want to go there? Any glaring grammatical errors? Or am I good to send it off to whoever gets it?
Thanks- I realize this was rather lengthy, but I really appreciate it.